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Many today feel that attention spans are becoming shorter due to the prevalence of social media. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years,
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many
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 spans because of social
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 has been in the spotlight of public
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 that of the government. Many
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 argue that social
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 tend to construct with visualization or listening. It is a well-known fact that many
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social
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 even though they do not focus on and even do work.
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 study, many company owners argue that many
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social
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social
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. Another reason for my argument is that the
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, the
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, many
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 watch Youtube Shorts, which are less than 1-minute videos. They teach a lot of
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social
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