Your child's school is going for a trip out of the country for 3 days and parent is allowed to join the group. Write a letter to school. In your letter, you should: •ask questions about the trip •tell them why you want to join the group •explain how you can help.
Dear sir,
I am writing to you regarding the proposed trip for the school children to Dubai next month. My daughter is a 4 year old grade one student in your school and I would to know more about the trip.
Firstly
, I would appreciate it if I could get the specific date that the tour will commence and also
the details of activities to take place while
in the United Arab Emirates. Although
I will have a busy schedule at work next month, however
, I would love to join the group in Dubai.
As to the reasons for showing interest, firstly
, Bryan is still a toddler and needs to be well taken care of by me. He has some level of autism, therefore
, being around someone he is comfortable with will help to confidently participate in every fun activity with other children.
So, being a part of the tour will make the planning committee's work easier. I would be able to cater for his needs, clean him up and feed him when necessary. Also
, the security team will worry less about his safety.
I hope you will consider my request.
Yours faithfully,
Moses.Submitted by callmosomitoyin on
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Ensure to include all relevant details regarding the questions you have about the trip, as this will make your letter more comprehensive.
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Try to maintain a consistent tone throughout the letter. There are small deviations in formality that could be smoothed out.
coherence and cohesion
The letter is well-organized, with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. There is a logical flow from asking questions, to explaining reasons for joining, and detailing how you can help.
coherence and cohesion
Polite and clear closing is used, which strengthens the formality and appropriateness of the letter.
coherence and cohesion
Good use of coherent paragraphs to separate different points of discussion. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect, which aids clarity.
task achievement
The letter directly addresses the task prompt, asking questions, explaining reasons to join, and stating how you can help, all of which align well with the task requirements.
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The tone is formal yet friendly, appropriate for a letter to a school authority.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite