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People think that government should increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles to solve environmental problems. Give your opinion.

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It is widely believed that to tackle environmental problems, the government should raise the price of fuel used in different means of transport. Personally, I agree with
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 solution for some reasons. First of all, when higher taxes are imposed on petrol for vehicles, there could be a reduction in the amount of natural resources which are exploited to produce
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 fuel. It is obvious that many resources
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 as coal, gas, and oil are being exhausted in order to meet the demand for transport.
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, it takes these minerals thousands of years to recover,
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,
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 method could play a vital role in protecting them.
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, the government can
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 use the money from fuel taxes to improve and conserve the environment and natural habitats of many species.
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, since there are higher prices, citizens would cut down on the use of private vehicles which are the main cause of air pollution. People would tend to commute around the city by public transport
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 as buses or subways in order to save a huge amount of money spent on petrol.
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 a report in Baomoi newspaper, a few months ago, when not many people in Vietnam can afford the extremely high cost of gas and petrol
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 the lack of them and
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, the percentage of bus users doubled that in the same time of
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 year.
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 trend results in better air quality in a number of cities in Vietnam, and the reduction of detrimental emissions from vehicles. In conclusion, increasing the cost of gas for transportation is one of the greatest ways that the authorities should take into consideration to deal with a huge quantity of environmental issues.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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