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The bar chart below shows numbers of seals, whales and dolphins recorded in the Gormez Straits from 2006 to 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows numbers of seals, whales and dolphins recorded in the Gormez Straits from 2006 to 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the
population
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 statistics of 3 sea animals:
seals
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,
whales
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 and
dolphins
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; living in the Gormez Straits in 4 different years: 2006, 2010, 2014, and 2018.
Overall
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, the number of
dolphins
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 that lived in
this
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 location more than doubled over
this
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 period,
while
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 the number of
whales
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 remained relatively constant, and the
population
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 of
seals
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 fluctuated. In 2006, over 40
seals
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 were living in the Gormez Straits, followed by
whales
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 at around 23, and
dolphins
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 accounted for under 20 individuals. Four years later, in 2010,
whales
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 became the most abundant species in the area, with 25 individuals.
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, the difference among the three species were minimal, with
seals
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 being the second most common at 23, and
dolphins
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 at the bottom of the list again, with around 21 living locally in 2010. In 2014,
whales
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 were the only animal that experienced a reduction in
population
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, decreasing from 25 in 2010 to just over 20 individuals in 2014.
Seals
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 and
dolphins
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,
on the other hand
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, saw a significant rise in the record, with 34 and 33, respectively in 2014. By 2018,
dolphins
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 reached their peak
population
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, with over 50 creatures, which is three times more than in 2006 and almost double the
population
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 recorded in 2014.
Seals
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 ended 2018 being the second most common of those animals at the Gormez Strait,
while
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whales
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, despite their increase, remained the least spotted animal in
this
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 location.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, seals, whales, dolphins with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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