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Do you agree that establishing road tolls is the best solution to the problem of congested roads?

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As the phenomenon of urbanisation rises more and more people tend to accumulate in modern cities.
This
 situation has created an important burden on the circulation
system
, which is congested roads.Many people argue that the solution behind
this
 development is the placement of road tolls. As far as I am concerned, I do not believe that
this
 will address the problem properly and in
this
 ,essay I will present more efficient alternatives.
Initially
, the reinforcement of the public
system
 of
transportation
 has more advantages in comparison to road tolls.First of all, investing in the proliferation of public transport by expanding the number of metro and bus lanes
as well as
 by introducing additional routes and stations will face the problem to the core since the more citizens have access to common means of
transportation
 the less cars are going to be on the roads.
For instance
, when an individual from the suburbs wants to go downtown
instead
 of riding his car, he will be able to use the subway.
Therefore
 the expansion of public
transportation
 will reduce significantly the usage of cars.
Secondly
, another major parameter in order to be increased the usage of the existing common circulation
system
 is the creation of financial incentives.
In other words
, the total cost of using public
transportation
 on a daily basis must be substantially lower than riding your car everywhere.
This
 means that citizens must be able to issue flexible monthly passes that meet their requirements at a profitable price without exceptions
Thus
, the offer of appealing options in regard to public transport will exceed the advantages of taking the car resulting in reduced traffic congestion. In conclusion, investing in the development of the public circulation
system
 constitutes a better solution in the decongest of the roadways than establishing road tolls because it is tackling the problem by reducing the number of vehicles that are being used
instead
 of just regulating the traffic flow.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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