Writing Task 2 Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.

There is a controversial issue that should
experts
need to stay in the nation ,which
they
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been trained, and make some contributions. Some people claim it is necessary to require them
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, in
the
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contrast, some believe
experts
can make the decision by themselves. In my opinion, I think those professionals have
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right to move as
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a human, at the same time, they
also
can provide some benefits back to the country which has educated them.
First,
those
experts
can have manifold ways to show their appreciation to the place
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them. I accept the idea that it causes a huge cost to train
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professionals, if those trained people
leaves
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the country after completing their courses, those remarkable financial
supports
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will be in vain.
Nevertheless
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right to move, it is illegal to restrict them in any case. And I believe, without the geographical limitation, there is still a great proportion of
experts
,like professors, scientists and craftsmen,
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willing to stay in the same nation
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they took lessons.
Second,
have it not been for being educated in different places, it is hard for those
experts
to gain diverse perspectives from
others culture
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. In
this
contemporary world,
to be
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a
muti-functional
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and
multi-cultural
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person can
contributes
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more benefits to
the
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society.
For example
, some doctors travel around the world to cure some rare diseases
among
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Africa, South America and the part of
southeast
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Asian countries, with those kind
doctor’
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medical
expertises
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, the
deseases
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diseases
can be improved significantly.
Therefore
, the county which has trained them can gain a good reputation
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this
contribution. In conclusion, I partially understand the main reason why some people advocate that the
experts
need to stay,
however
, for a widened and bigger picture, it is better for professionals to decide.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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