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The chart below shows the level of satisfaction of health care system in four countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the level of satisfaction of health care system in four countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 line graph depicts the percentage of satisfaction
people
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on
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 the health care system. Is It clear from the diagram that there was a decline in Canada in 1998
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According to
 what is shown the UK has a constant rate in all the years with more than 20%, but Canada has varied
percent
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started
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 with the highest percentage in 1991 and with a
decreased
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 in 1998.
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, there was
a
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growth in the US in 1998
,
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 and started to be stable in 2006.
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, There was a random
percent
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 in
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 with increased in 1998 and decreased in the next period.
To sum up
, we could say that the United Kingdom was stable, but the other countries have
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random growth and decline in some years.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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