Write a letter to your sibling. In your letter: – Describe what you did for your last birthday – Ask for photos of your sibling’s last holiday – Talk about something you are looking forward to

#birthday #photos #sibling’s #holiday

Hello Zainab, Hope

this

letter finds you in good health. It’s been a long time since I receive a letter from your side,

therefore

, I decided to write one to you.

Firstly

, you asked me about my birthday which my friends celebrated on the beach

last

year, I immensely enjoyed each and every moment

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and missed you so much. It was a surprise party at the hut near the beach which was all decorated with balloons and buntings as you saw in the pictures that I sent you.

Secondly

, I knew already that you’d forgotten to send me your pictures of the

last

holiday you spent at the resort. Share your snaps as soon as possible. I can’t wait to see those beautiful shots!

Lastly

, do let me know if you are free

this

weekend as I would love to go somewhere with you. How about going to the theme park? Do pour some ideas so we can decide mutually. Hope to hear you soon. Regards, Marium

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

167 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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