The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)

The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.  Write at least 150 words.   (20 mins.)
The graph illustrates the emissions of
air
pollution from discrete
sources
in each year between 1990 and 2005 in the UK.
According to
the graph, the most
air
pollution which is released from Industry is the largest amount of
air
pollutants
accounting for total
Air
Pollutants
.
Although
there was a
dramatically
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decrease in
air
quality
problem
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problems
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between 1993 and 1996 (approximately 5
million
of
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tones
falling to about 3
million
of
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Tons) and a
steadily
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decline in the others year from 1990(estimated 5.5
million
of
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tones
) to 2005 (about 2
million
of
tones
), the number of
air
pollutants
released by the industry was the highest compared to the others main
sources
(Transport and Households). Meanwhile, the
numbers
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of
air
pollutants
emitted from transport always
stay
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consistent at 1
million
tons throughout the period(1990-2005). Focusing on the amount of
Air
pollutants
coming from household
sources
, there
was
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1
million
tones
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tonnes
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of contaminants in 1990.
Then
, the numbers decrease slightly to approximately 1.9
million
tones
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in1993
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in 1993
and
subsequently
decrease
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and stay the same numbers in 1993 and 1996 respectively.
Finally
, it steadily dropped to
at
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0.1
million
tones
at the end
of the period In conclusion, the total number of
air
pollutants
produced by three main
sources
in the UK from 1990 to 2005 persistently reduced from 7
million
tonnes of
air
contaminants to 4
million
tonnes in 1999
then
subsequently
marginally dropped to about 3.9
million
tones
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and ultimately fell to 3
million
tones
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tonnes
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "subsequently".
Vocabulary: Replace the words air, sources, pollutants, million, tones with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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