Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extend to you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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universal language in
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world
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.There is a common sense that
music
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creates a bond between individuals not only from different age groups but
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cultures.I strongly hold the view that
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has the power to influence
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from various
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groups
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touching their souls.
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with,
music
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is the best way to release stress and make
people
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feel at ease. It can reach the deepest souls and
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undoubtedly
heal them
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regardless of their ages, religions and nations.
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,
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well-known composers
such
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as
Bethowen
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Beethoven
has
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plenty of melodies which
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make
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people
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adore them all around the
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however
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he was unable to hear his own melodies himself which prove the theory that
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is not made for hearing but feeling it.
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, it is impossible not to
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by the
using
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of seven notes in
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various ways and makes
persons
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people
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feel it.
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,in
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world
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music
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types and tastes have changed
al
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lot,
the
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spiritual side remains as it was in
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last
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decades.
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,nowadays the genres has altered and each year new
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type appear on
music
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platforms which are available
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everyone around the
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. To illustrate,
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days ago Travis Scott who is known as a
repper
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rapper
released his new rep
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on Apple
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music
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and it turned
my
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favorite
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one in just seconds.
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, when I checked the
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related to
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song, it was not
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surprising
that almost half of the
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population loved the song as much as me. In conclusion, it is unbelievable that
music
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is created only for making
people
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have fun rather than
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encouraging
them to
listen
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their deep sides. As there is not
pelnty
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plenty
of reasons to bring
people
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together
besides
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discussion
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of universal problems,
music
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is
an
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only way of making them relax in
contary
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contrary
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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