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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The map below shows three proposed sites for a new supermarket (A, B and c) in the city of Ellington. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The map below shows three proposed sites for a new supermarket (A, B and c) in the city of Ellington. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
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The map illustrates three potential sites for a new supermarket in the city of Pellington. As can be seen, the population in Pellington is 120,000 which is quite a large city.
Hence
, there is a need to carefully select which
area
 is the most suitable.
Firstly
,
site
 A seems to have the largest residential
area
 in the region with a traffic-free zone and a
medium sized
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 park situated in the middle.
Moreover
, the industrial
area
 in
site
 A is
also
 the largest compared to the same areas in
site
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B
 and
c
.
Next,
considering
site
B
 which is on the east side of
site
 A, around 80% of
site
B
 is countryside and the rest is for industries. There is a long and straight motorway dividing
site
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 A and
B
 from the north to the south.
Finally
, let
US
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 consider
site
c
.
site
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c
 has the second largest residential
area
 in Pellington and there is an airport on the west side.
Site
 A and
c
 are separated by a long railway which is close to the traffic-free zone of
site
 A.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, site, b, c with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population density
  • foot traffic
  • residential area
  • commercial area
  • outskirts
  • industrial zone
  • city center
  • commuting
  • accessible
  • proposed sites
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