The map below shows three proposed sites for a new supermarket (A, B and c) in the city of Ellington. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows three proposed sites for a new supermarket (A, B and c) in the city of Ellington. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map illustrates three potential sites for a new supermarket in the city of Pellington. As can be seen, the population in Pellington is 120,000 which is quite a large city.
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, there is a need to carefully select which
area
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is the most suitable.
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,
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A seems to have the largest residential
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in the region with a traffic-free zone and a
medium sized
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park situated in the middle.
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, the industrial
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in
site
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A is
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the largest compared to the same areas in
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B
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and
c
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.
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considering
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B
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which is on the east side of
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A, around 80% of
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B
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is countryside and the rest is for industries. There is a long and straight motorway dividing
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A and
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from the north to the south.
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, let
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consider
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c
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.
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c
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has the second largest residential
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in Pellington and there is an airport on the west side.
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A and
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are separated by a long railway which is close to the traffic-free zone of
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A.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words area, site, b, c with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • population density
  • foot traffic
  • residential area
  • commercial area
  • outskirts
  • industrial zone
  • city center
  • commuting
  • accessible
  • proposed sites
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