some people believe that air travel should be restricted because it causes air pollution. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Nowadays,
air
pollution
has been a major problem in the world. It is often argued that
air
transportation should be restricted since it results
to
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air
pollution
. In my opinion, I somewhat disagree with
this
statement and I will discuss the positive and negative impacts of
air
pollution
.
Firstly
, the positive impact is that it is
more
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faster and easier for people
travel
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by
air
. In
the
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view of the fact that people
travel
comfortably without encountering any problems like bad roads, kidnapping
unlike
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road transportation which is not safe.
For instance
, when an individual needs to go for a business trip or meeting, all the person needs to do is
to
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book a flight and
gets
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to the country in no time.
Secondly
,
air
pollution
should
also
not be neglected. It releases hazardous waste like carbon dioxide,
nitrogen
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and nitrogen
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oxide emission into the
earth
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atmosphere.
As a result
, it affects one’s health and might
leads
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to death when inhaled into the
body
system. In some cases, when it is quickly treated an individual’s life can be saved. Too much
of
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air
travel
can
also
cause adults to age faster and some other diseases like cancer.
In other words
, the chance of
body
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to form
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blood clots increases when the
body
is not moving correctly.
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, when a person is onboard
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a long
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long haul
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flight.
In addition
, blood pressure can
also
rise unexpectedly because
one’s
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have
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phobia of
air
travel
which can cause health issues. In conclusion,
air
travel
is beneficial because it is faster for people to move from one place to another.
Nevertheless
, It should
also
abandoned
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in some theories as it affects the
body
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health.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • significant contributor
  • pollution
  • carbon emissions
  • restrict
  • alternative modes of transportation
  • environmentally friendly
  • technological advancements
  • economic benefits
  • environmental concerns
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