Some people prefer to live in a house while other feel that living in an apartment has more advantages. Discuss Advantage and disadvantages

Accomodation
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Accommodation
is the main part to live in the
desireable
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desirable
place, either it is a
house
or an apartment in
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a builing
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builing
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building
.
Therefore
, some
people
prefer that it is
benificial
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beneficial
to live in
house
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a house
the house
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but some
says
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say
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an
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apply
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apartments are more
advantagous
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advantageous
. As I
belive
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believe
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it
is totally depend
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totally depends
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on
personal
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a personal
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choice to live in an apartment or a
house
, Let discuss both
point
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points
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of view.
To begin
with, the
people
who prefer
houses
and
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apply
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says
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say
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it is more
benificial
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beneficial
,
such
as
houses
has your own privacy in term of your building
is
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being
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seprate
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separate
separated
from other
houses
so that there is not any close contact with
neigbour
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neighbour
.
Therfore
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Therefore
, if there is not any close contact so
people
can enjoy loud music
amd
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and
enjoy their quality time with their loved ones, to
examlified
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exemplified
,
according to
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a surrvey
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surrvey
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survey
surveys
in
police
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the police
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department police got more calls
by
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from
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people
from
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the apartment
an apartment
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apartment
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apartments
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for loud music or loud noise around them.
Moreover
,
houses
has
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have
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their own parking in front of the
house
and
has
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have
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their own laundry build-in
house
so that they
not
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do not
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have to move
alot
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a lot
to do laundry and to reach their
vechicles
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vehicles
.
On the other hand
,
An
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apply
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apartments
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apartment
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has
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have
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their own
benifits
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benefits
to
live
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living
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in
such
as
people
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for people
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who like to live on heights
an
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and
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apertments
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apartments
apartment
are
best
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the best
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place for them
thry
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they
can enjoy the beautiful
scean
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scene
ocean
from
height
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a height
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and they can more
clear
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a clear
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view
then
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than
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someone who lives in
house
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the house
a house
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or ground level.
In
addition
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,addition
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an
apratment
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apartment
are
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is
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more safer
then
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than
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any
house
on
road
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the road
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because there are checkpoints in apartments where any unknown
being
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is being
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checked for security reasons.
Whereas
,
houses
are individually dependent for their own security and handling purpose.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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