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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both views and give your oponion.

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In
the
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 world where
abundance
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an abundance
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 of
information
 can be freely grasped with
internet
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the internet
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, often times might unlock the door to unprecedented outcomes. With free
informations
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information
pieces of information
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, it might be useful to scholars, yet those who accessed it cannot be fully monitored
hence
lead
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leading
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 to
gatekeep
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 them. The writer will explore the debate and argue why unlimited access to
information
 is fruitful. The window of knowledge should not be bounded by regulations because it might deter future education development. By withholding
data
, it
limit
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 the progression of researchers to creativity and novel inventions. Vulnerable
sholars
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scholars
,
such
 as university students, will be the first victim as they are the ones who mainly experiment on various journals and
data
,
hence
 prohibiting them to excel.
On the other hand
, withholding
information
 is
also
 understandable
due to
tendency
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the tendency
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 of
abused
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abuse
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. Some
data
 that can be wrongfully exploited and
utilize
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utilised
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 for negative intentions
in
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is
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the
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apply
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contrary
of
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to
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 education development.
Such
 cases can be found when accessing e-commerce customers
data
,
perpetraitor
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perpetrator
perpetrators
 can misuse private details for embezzlement. In conclusion, the rightfulness of free knowledge for all is still valid to some certain degree.
Information
 related to
prolong
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prolonging
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 the future of education should be fully supported and non-commercialized.
However
, classified
informations
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information
pieces of information
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 should be disclosed and governed under regulations
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