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In recent years, more and more people are choosing to read ebooks rather than paper books. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#years #people #ebooks #paper #books
It is certainly true that today individuals prefer
read
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e-
books
instead
 of
print
books
. In my
persepective
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perspective
, the merits of electronic
books
inculding
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including
, affordable,
eco-friendly
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and eco-friendly
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 outweigh the demerits
such
 as,
can
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that can
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 cause
health
 issues,
create
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and create
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 unemployment. On the one hand, there are several disadvantages of digital
books
 on
overall
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the overall
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health
 of
people
as well as
increase
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the
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in the
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 rate of unemployment.
Firstly
, reading
books
form
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from
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 technology can
leads
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lead
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health
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to health
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 problems namely,
stree
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stress
 and strain
of
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on
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eyes
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the eyes
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,
sleep
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and sleep
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 disorders.
This
 is because
people
 who read
books
 via smartphones or computers are
exposure
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 to blue light from
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the screen
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screen
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screens
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, which
this
 light harmful to human
brian
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brain
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 and eyes.
Secondly
,
e-
books
 do not need to
print
 on
paper
, which means less demand
in
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for
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paper
.
In other words
, decrease the jobs opportunity for
people
 in
factories
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 production of
paper
.
Therefore
,
this
 can will leads increase
the
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 rate of poverty and crime.
Although
 the disadvantages mentioned above, I would like to argue that
benefits
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the benefits
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 of digital
books
 outweigh the drawbacks. To
beging
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begin
 with,
e-
books
is
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are
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 inexpensive and
maybe
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may be
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 provide for free.
This
 is because
the
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e-
books
not
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do not
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 need to
print
in
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on
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paper
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the paper
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.
As a result
,
e-
books
 provide
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an accessable
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accessable soruce
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accessible source
 of information for poor
people
, especially in developing countries. Another benefit of
e-
books
 is environmentally friendly. To illustrate, digital
books
,
not
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do not
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 require
to
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printed
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print
in
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on
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paper
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, which mean no need to cut down
forest
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the forest
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 in order to make
it
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them
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.
Thus
 ,
e-
books
 can assist to reduce Co2 emissions
as well as
 global warming and climate change,
this
beucae
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became
because
 trees
a
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play a significant role to absorb carbon footprint from the atmosphere. In conclusion, in my
opinion
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 the upsides of electronic
books
 including, it cheap, eco-friendly outweigh the downsides
such
 as
,
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apply
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health
 problems,
unemployment
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and unemployment
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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