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Today the internet has replaced traditional books as a source of information. Discuss the Advantage & Disadvantage.

#internet #books #source #information #advantage
In the contemporary era, it is stated that digital methods
has
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 replaced
books
 tremendously .I firmly opine the benefits of
internet
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 are higher than the downsides. On the one hand,the merits of
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internet
 are proved to be far outweigh the demerits as it is more accessible and affordable than written forms.
That is
 because access to data via technology can be done regardless
the
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 boundaries of time or place.
For instance
 ,students can search
information
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for information
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 in their
house
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 at any time of day
unlike
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books
 that need to go to
library
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 and
be
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 restricted to certain
timetable
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timetables
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 and locations.
In addition
 to that ,the expenses of using neoteric applications are much
more
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cheaper than the high cost of buying
books
.
That is
 to say ,downloading
books
’ cost is next to null compared to
high
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 bill of buying
books
 or just commuting with your car to reach the target bookshops.
Thus
internet
 is both cheaper and easier
according
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 to all aspects.
On the other hand
,one major drawback of
internet
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 is related to certain ailments caused by sitting for long hours looking for information through technological devices.
Such
 as backache,sight
problem
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 and even distraction
due to
 long periods of time spent in front of screens.
That is
 to say,
Books
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seem
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seems
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seem
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 to be
more
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healthier .Yet We can not modify the book size or use certain tools
such
 as highlighting or maximizing the font,
Therefore
, using
books
 has
been
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deteriorated in the
last
 decades.
To conclude
,
although
books
 are used to be the original source of information, the easiness and the low cost of
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internet
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 surpass the usage of printed materials,
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coherence cohesion
Develop your arguments with more specific examples and evidence to support your points. Provide more detailed and relevant example to give weight to your arguments.
task achievement
Your introduction and conclusion are well-structured, but consider connecting the two more effectively. Ensure that you fully address all aspects of the task question, and provide a balanced argument by acknowledging both the advantages and disadvantages of the internet as a source of information.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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