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Today the internet has replaced traditional books as a source of information. Discuss the Advantage & Disadvantage.

#internet #books #source #information #advantage
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In the contemporary era, it is stated that digital methods
has
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 replaced
books
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 tremendously .I firmly opine the benefits of
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internet
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the internet
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 are higher than the downsides. On the one hand,the merits of
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internet
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 are proved to be far outweigh the demerits as it is more accessible and affordable than written forms.
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 because access to data via technology can be done regardless
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 boundaries of time or place.
For instance
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 ,students can search
information
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for information
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 in their
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homes
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 at any time of day
unlike
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books
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 that need to go to
library
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the library
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 and
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 restricted to certain
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 and locations.
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 to that ,the expenses of using neoteric applications are much
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cheaper than the high cost of buying
books
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.
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 to say ,downloading
books
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’ cost is next to null compared to
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 bill of buying
books
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 or just commuting with your car to reach the target bookshops.
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internet
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 is both cheaper and easier
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according
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 to all aspects.
On the other hand
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,one major drawback of
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internet
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the internet
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 is related to certain ailments caused by sitting for long hours looking for information through technological devices.
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 as backache,sight
problem
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 and even distraction
due to
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 long periods of time spent in front of screens.
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 to say,
Books
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seems
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 to be
more
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healthier .Yet We can not modify the book size or use certain tools
such
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 as highlighting or maximizing the font,
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, using
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 has
been
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deteriorated in the
last
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 decades.
To conclude
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,
although
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books
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 are used to be the original source of information, the easiness and the low cost of
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the internet
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internet
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 surpass the usage of printed materials,
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coherence cohesion
Develop your arguments with more specific examples and evidence to support your points. Provide more detailed and relevant example to give weight to your arguments.
task achievement
Your introduction and conclusion are well-structured, but consider connecting the two more effectively. Ensure that you fully address all aspects of the task question, and provide a balanced argument by acknowledging both the advantages and disadvantages of the internet as a source of information.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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