Today the internet has replaced traditional books as a source of information. Discuss the Advantage & Disadvantage.

In the contemporary era, it is stated that digital methods
has
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replaced
books
tremendously .I firmly opine the benefits of
internet
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are higher than the downsides. On the one hand,the merits of
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internet
are proved to be far outweigh the demerits as it is more accessible and affordable than written forms.
That is
because access to data via technology can be done regardless
the
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boundaries of time or place.
For instance
,students can search
information
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for information
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in their
house
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homes
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at any time of day
unlike
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, unlike
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books
that need to go to
library
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and
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restricted to certain
timetable
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timetables
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and locations.
In addition
to that ,the expenses of using neoteric applications are much
more
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cheaper than the high cost of buying
books
.
That is
to say ,downloading
books
’ cost is next to null compared to
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bill of buying
books
or just commuting with your car to reach the target bookshops.
Thus
internet
is both cheaper and easier
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to all aspects.
On the other hand
,one major drawback of
internet
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the internet
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is related to certain ailments caused by sitting for long hours looking for information through technological devices.
Such
as backache,sight
problem
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and even distraction
due to
long periods of time spent in front of screens.
That is
to say,
Books
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seems
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to be
more
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healthier .Yet We can not modify the book size or use certain tools
such
as highlighting or maximizing the font,
Therefore
, using
books
has
been
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deteriorated in the
last
decades.
To conclude
,
although
books
are used to be the original source of information, the easiness and the low cost of
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internet
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surpass the usage of printed materials,
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Your introduction and conclusion are well-structured, but consider connecting the two more effectively. Ensure that you fully address all aspects of the task question, and provide a balanced argument by acknowledging both the advantages and disadvantages of the internet as a source of information.

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