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Government of many countries had to impose a lockdown to control the Coronavirus pandemic. What were the advantages and disadvantages of this lockdown. Give example from your own experience.

#government #countries #lockdown #control #coronavirus #pandemic
In the contemporary era, viruses
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 widespread around the world.
Conona
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Corona
 virus is
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 recent example
this
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.
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, authorities
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 imposed stringent curfew to tackle the serious pandemic.There are two camps ,
While
 some people opine that lockdown is the best,
other
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others
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 emphasize the necessity of
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keeping
life
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in
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 a normal track.I firmly
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believe
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belive
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 that
demerits
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 of lockdown are higher than its downsides On the one hand,the merits of strict restriction far outweigh the demerits.
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family bonds have become much
more close
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 during the pandemic period .
That is
 to say, parents find plenty of time to sit and tackle their
children
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 problems which seems impossible before the crisis.
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,attending
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learning
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 classes with
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primary grade
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 child would give an obvious guide for a parent about his/her kid’s level and
thus
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In addition
 to that the major benefits of curfew
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lied in saving
people
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life
 from the potential hazards of infectious aliment
as well as
 keeping the wheel of
life
 going .To clarify , saving nations’ health will guarantee continuity in each sector.
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 ,keeping the illness away will allow doctors,teachers,police officers,engineers and
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 to
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 their tasks ,
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this
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 wheel going .
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,major
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of
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curfew
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are
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life
 isolation and depression .
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 other words, staying at home will encourage folks to live alone with no social interaction which is essential to
holistic
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 development of personality.
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,
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pupils
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 who learn totally via digital learning will grow with
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 of skills
such
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 and real communication.
As a result
, isolation may lead to tension ,depression and dissatisfaction. To recapitulate,
although
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 surpass
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 disadvantages. It is our responsibility as an individual to find positivity in each condition as the saying
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 “Whatever happens ,happens for good”
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pandemic
  • impose
  • lockdown
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • reduction
  • spread
  • virus
  • save lives
  • overwhelmed
  • healthcare systems
  • develop
  • distribute
  • vaccines
  • individual
  • family
  • well-being
  • pollution
  • environmental benefits
  • awareness
  • cooperation
  • communities
  • negative impact
  • economy
  • businesses
  • loss of employment
  • financial instability
  • mental health issues
  • disruption
  • education
  • social isolation
  • loneliness
  • rise
  • domestic violence cases
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