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The Charts below give information about the way in which water was used in different countries in 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The Charts below give information about the way in which water was used in different countries in 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The Chart illustrates the Data about how
water
 was consumed in different counties in the year 2000. The Pie chart depicts the consumption of
water
 in different areas like in
th
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the
 farming,household activities and in
the
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factories,
while
 on the other
side
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 the Bar chart reveals
the
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information
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 the usage of
water
 among the Asian, north-american and Pacific countries in the respective field.
To begin
 with the global utilization of
water
 in the year 2000, the farming field consumes the highest around 70% of the total usage
while
 on the flip side, the consumption of
water
 in Industry and in Domestic activities
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 around 22% and 8% respectively.
Furthermore
 the
water
 utilization in the Asian countries, India Utilized excessive
water
 in the factories rather than in the area of farming and in the domestic area less than 10%. ,
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world Canada used most of the percentage of
water
 in household work and very less use in
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farming and in the factories less than 20% of the total
while
 the New-Zealand consumed almost
same
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precentage
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percentage
 of
water
 in Industry and in Domestic work
while
 10% in the farming.
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