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Transporting large amount of food to richer nations from developing countries is having an impact on air pollution and climate change. Some people say such imports should therefore be reduced. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Importing huge amounts of
food
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 to developed
nations
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 from under-developed
countries
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 is having an impact on
air
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pollution
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 and
climate
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change
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. A handful of individuals say that in
order
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 to reduce
air
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pollution
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 and
climate
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,
food
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 should not be imported. I totally disagree with the given notion. there are many reasons why
food
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 should be imported which will be elaborated in the subsequent paragraphs. A number of reasons why
food
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 ought to be transported to opulent
countries
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 from poorer
countries
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. The predominant one is that everyone knows that
food
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 is an essential
to
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source in everyone's life as without
food
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 no one can survive in today's life. In developed
countries
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, there may be fewer farms in
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 to produce
food
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 over there,
therefore
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 they purchased
food
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 from those
countries
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 where it is produced in
a huge amounts
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huge amounts
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. If
food
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less
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is less
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 produced in wealthy
countries
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, those people who live in richer
nations
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 would not be able to survive for a long time.
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, in Canada, numerous people live a healthy life just because of India as India is produced cereals
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in
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Canada which
is
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are
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 healthy to eat. developing
nations
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also
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 earn a lot of money by importing different kinds of
food
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 from other
countries
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.
This
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 would be helpful in
order
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 to make the economy better for their country.
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,
food
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 importation should not be reduced as not only it is fruitful for developed
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 but
also
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 for poorer
countries
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.
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, only if
import
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importing
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food
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 from poorer
nations
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 to wealthy
countries
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stop
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stops
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to produce
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producing
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,
climate
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change
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as well as
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air
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pollution
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 could not be reduced so the regime should emphasise
on
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other aspects of increasing
air
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pollution
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 and
climate
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change
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. Other factors
such
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 as reducing the use of cars as it emits smoke
in
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into
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 the
air
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 which
are
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is
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 increasing
air
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pollution
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 in the atmosphere and
industries
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also
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 play a significant role in inclining
air
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pollution
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 and
climate
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change
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 in the environment so the government should reduce the use of
industries
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 or establish
industries
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 out of town in
order
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 to tackle with
this
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 hindrance. A survey conducted by the BBC (British Broadcast Corporation demonstrated that 78 per cent of
air
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pollution
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 and
climate
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change
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 were increased
due to
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 cars and factories. In conclusion,
although
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 a plethora of the masses
deems
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 that reducing
air
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pollution
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 and
climate
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change
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 transportation of
food
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 to other
countries
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 ought to be reduced, I disagree with
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 notion as
food
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 transportation is not having much impact on
air
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pollution
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 and
climate
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change
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, cars and
industries
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 play a significant role in
order
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 to do bad environment.
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