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The bar charts describe how much time a teacher spent at three school levels in four different countries in 2001.

The bar charts describe how much time a teacher spent at three school levels in four different countries in 2001.
The bar charts show the
time
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 consumption of a teacher at 3 academy levels in 4 different countries in 2001.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
USA
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 was the most popular in those areas.
In addition
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, spending
time
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 in
School
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 increased as the levels of
school
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. Regarding the
USA
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 enrollment, they spent
time
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 in
school
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 just over 700
hours
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, 1000
hours
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 and just less than 1200
hours
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, in terms of primary, lower secondary and upper secondary.
On the other hand
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, Japan was only 600
hours
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, 650
hours
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 and 700
hours
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 in the same order as the
USA
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. In fact, the maximum spending
time
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 at
school
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 in Japan was almost equal to or less than the minimum in the
USA
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.
Next,
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Spain had just over 600
hours
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, 720
hours
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 and significantly grew to 900
hours
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 in upper secondary. It was a similar result to Iceland because they
also
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 had a large gap between a lower secondary to an upper which was from 500
hours
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 to 910
hours
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. Despite
this
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, Japan slightly increased each degree. And the
USA
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 grew about 200
hours
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 more each
time
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, usa, school, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar charts, time allocation, primary education, lower secondary level, upper secondary level
  • teacher workload, classroom hours, non-teaching duties
  • educational system, comparative analysis, pedagogic practices
  • instructional time, professional development, teacher's responsibilities
  • discrepancies, workload distribution, teaching hours
  • statistical data, time management, educators, pedagogues
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