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Many doctors are concerned about the high use of computer games by children and young people. What mental and physical problems may arise from excessive use of these games? How could these problems be reduced?

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Nowadays,
children
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 and young people enjoy playing video
games
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 more than activities with their friends.
Games
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 help us in entertainment but we have to limit ourselves before addicting to it.
Children
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 and young people are interested in playing
games
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 because there are more popular
games
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 right now. Technology is developing day by day. Some of them think outside activities are boring so they prefer a sedentary lifestyle to an active lifestyle. Partly
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 the stress from life, about the mental,
children
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 chose to be addicted to
games
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 to relieve their anxiety. But they don’t know there are lots of ways to make them feel better.
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, they can hang out with their friends and talk to feel not alone in life, sometimes they can talk to their parents about how they feel. As
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 problems, if they abuse the game and sit in one place for too long, bad things will bring harm to the body like obesity, inadequate development,
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 leading to depression, it
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 makes their health impairment, health warning and affected emotions. To stop
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 situation, we should watch programs that benefit us, read some remedies, and think of some initiatives that bring benefits to them. Adults must control their
children
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 to play enough
games
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.
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, they have to avoid the situation that the
games
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 contain haunting images and are not suitable for
children
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's ages.
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, horror
games
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 should be banned for
children
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 under eighteen years old. In conclusion, playing
games
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 too much can cause diseases
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 and bad effects on health.
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, always know the limit and stop to avoid bad results. We always have to stay healthy.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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