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Some people think that certain old buildings are more worth preserving than the other ones? Do you think that the advantages of preserving these old buildings outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is popular that a number of residents think that precise ancient architecture is a top priority to safeguard.
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, there are numerous valuable structures which should
be protect
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 by civic authorities and city dwellers but I believe that
merits
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 of preserving old
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constructions
 overshadow
demerits
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. On the one hand , people should recognize the fact that why national and local authorities should invest money in protecting other valuable buildings,
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 as cultural and historical architecture.
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,
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 types of old structures are allied
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not solely
cultural
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 values but
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historical
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 values of humanity. To specify,
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the upsides
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upsides
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 of
these preservation
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 is to protect
origin
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 of individuals and their nations.
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 city dwellers so that they are proud of their specific culture to
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minimise
lack
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 of knowledge
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 their origin.
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 dissimilar old buildings’ conservation has triggered many upsides , it can not weaken
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 of protecting precise ancient architecture. One simple benefit is to guarantee modifications of time up to now.
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, old
buidings
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buildings
 still have been ensured by members of families
thoughout
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throughout
 various generations, because
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this
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 are places where their actors were born and grown up have existed many memory.
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, another simple merit is to bring national triumphs and a large amount of money .
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 , Hoi An has many certain old buildings which have attached tourists from other countries to create a large quantity of money to cater for
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 of individuals. In conclusion,
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 in spite of having different old buildings which should be guaranteed , I believe that ancient structures’ preservation still is
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top favouritism and its merits outweigh demerits.

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