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The pie chart shows average monthly student expenditure in the UK in 2016. The bar chart shows sources of student income in the same year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows average monthly student expenditure in the UK in 2016. The bar chart shows sources of student income in the same year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart gives information about how much money students spent in the UK for the year 2016 and the chart illustrates where they got their money in 2016. Units are measured in
pounds
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 in the first figure and in percentages in the second.
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, it can be seen that most of the expenses were related to paying for the place they lived and food. Credit, relatives and part-time jobs were the main sources of income for those people. Rent was the most significant
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 year (385
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), followed by nourishment (124
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) and other things (91
pounds
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). The three left categories (bills, socialising and travel) were more unpopular (69, 64 and 52
pounds
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 respectively). The biggest source of money that students had was their loans with just around 80% of their yields. Approximately 70% of people's incomes were from their family and half-day work. Much less of the tested persons counted on things like savings, overdrafts and funding (around 40%). Question for Task 1

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Vocabulary: Replace the words pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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