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You have just returned from holiday and were not satisfied with your trip. Write to the travel agency. In your letter •Say where / when you went on holiday •Explain why you are not satisfied with your holiday •Tell them what you would like them to do

#holiday #trip #travel #agency #•say #•explain #•tell
Dear Uyen, I'm writing to complain about just
returned
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returning
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 from holiday and were not satisfied with my trip. I
am go
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went
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 to Da Lat
city
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City
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on
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apply
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last
 month with my family to relax
at the end
 of
year
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the year
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. I'm not satisfied with my holiday to start with homestay not warm water for a bath.
Therefore
,
evening
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this evening
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 my family
not
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was not
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 happy with not satisfied agency
of
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apply
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you provide for me.
Beside
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Besides
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,
weather
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the weather
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very
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is very
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 cold so it is very bad.
I'm
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I
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want
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want to
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 improve the
satisfied
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satisfaction of
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 the travel agency for
holiday
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the holiday
a holiday
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 of
customer
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customers
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. The agency should hotline customer care,
listen
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and listen
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 to
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the opinion
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opinion
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opinions
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 of
customer
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customers
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. I trust
this
 matter will be resolved soon. Thank you for watching. I look forward to your response. Yours faithfully, Minh Hiep
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph presents a clear main idea with supporting details, expanding on each point adequately. Use linking words to enhance the flow of information.
coherence cohesion
Organize the letter into clear introductory, body, and concluding paragraphs. Each paragraph should have a clear purpose and connect logically to the overall letter structure.
coherence cohesion
Open with a formal greeting and close with an appropriate sign-off. Use 'Dear [Travel Agency Name]' and conclude with 'Yours sincerely' if the name is known, or 'Yours faithfully' if it is not. Personal names should not be used in a formal letter to a company.
task achievement
Fully address all three bullet points in the task. Provide more specific details about your holiday, the issues encountered, and clear requests for what actions you want the travel agency to take.
task achievement
Maintain a polite and formal tone throughout the letter. Refrain from using casual language or abbreviations, and ensure the request is made respectfully.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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