The diagram below shows the development of a particular area between 1965 and the present day.

The given maps illustrate the adjustments that are planned to be implemented in a Biology School in regard to the present picture.

Overall

the main alterations are the conversion of the woodland into university facilities

as well as

the expansion of the existing wards.

Initially

, the most apparent change is the replacement of the woodland on the north side of the campus with a lab and an office building.

However

, some trees will be maintained around the new facilities.

In addition

, on the southwest of the area beside the main road, the woodland is planned to be transformed into a car park for the staff.

Moreover

, the cafe, the IT centre and the lecture room seem to be relocated to the southwest corner of the campus. In fact , an additional lecture room is presented in the future plan.

Also

, another teaching building is added opposite the existing one, located next to the car park. The

last

alteration is the conversion of the drama centre into a music one.

Finally

, the central library and the indoor sports hall which is on the northeast corner of the area remain unchanged.

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