The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one are of Britian. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distribiuted.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one are of Britian. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distribiuted.
These table and pie charts depict the police
budget
in Britain for two years. It is clear from the graph that the pie chart has the spending rate and the highest one was on
salaries
.
According to
what is shown there was an increase in the total
budget
with about an extra 14
million
in 2018, but most of the income of the
budget
is from the local taxes with about 10
million
. After that come from the national government with 2.3
million
, but the lowest income was from other sources with around half a
million
.
Moreover
, all the
budget
has to spend, but most of the spending was on
salaries
with 69% in 2018 and
that is
6% less than
last
year.
Next,
they put more money
on
Change preposition
into
show examples
technology with an extra 6%, but the buildings and transport system were equal in both years with 17 per cent.
To sum up
, we could say that
this
technology part has increased by 6%, but the
salaries
have declined to be from 75% to 69% and
that is
mean
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
6% of the
salaries
went to the technology part.
Submitted by qazwsxcvbnm1452 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, salaries, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: