You are going on holiday and have just remembered that your aunt lives in one of the cities you will be visiting. Write a letter to your aunt. In your letter: Tell her about your holiday plans Ask if you can stay with her for a portion of the trip Explain how you will make it up to her You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Aunt Sally,

Dear Aunt Sally, I hope you are in good health. It's been a
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since we met, but you would be happy to hear that I will be visiting Melbourne next month on the 15th of July. I will be staying for 10 days. During my stay, I will be attending a Taylor
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I am really excited about.
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, I will go for a city tour and will be visiting some of my favourite places in your city.
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, is it possible for me to stay at your home during my stay? Since
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the hotel prices during
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time are at their peak and
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exceeding my budget. I would surely make it up to you by giving you rent.
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, if you want anything from Pakistan, please do let me know, as I would love to bring gifts for you and your family. See you soon, Asma

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Task response: You answer all parts, but add a bit more about your trip plan to make it more full.
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Task response: Your tone is warm and polite, but one or two lines to your aunt can make it feel more personal.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your ideas are clear, but some linking words are not used well. Use simple links like 'also', 'because', and 'so'.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Put one main idea in each part. One part for trip plans, one part for your stay, and one part for how you will thank her.
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Task response: You cover the trip plan, the stay request, and how you will thank her.
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Task response: The tone is polite and right for a letter to family.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The greeting and closing are good and fit the task.
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