The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

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The provided charts give information about the proportion of

Australian

households

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household's

households'

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energy

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used from

appliances

and

greenhouse

gases.

Overall

, it is

clear

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seen that

Australian

households use

the

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most of their

energy

and

greenhouse

gas emissions for heating and water heating. Refrigeration is used the least in both charts. Getting back to the details, water heating and heating

energy

are the most popular among

Australian

household

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households

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42% and 30% respectively.

Conversely

, heating

system

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systems

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not popular as water heating and other

appliances

greenhouse

gas emissions. The figure is less than a fifth per cent. The

lowest

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least

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popular systems in both charts are cooling and lighting. The first

chart

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apply

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accounts

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% and 4% respectively. In the second

chart

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chart,

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it makes up 11% collectively. The refrigeration

energy

constitutes 7%,

whereas

the second

chart

the percentage is twice as much as the first

chart

In addition

, other

appliances

used wisely contribute 28% to

greenhouse

gas emissions,

while

energy

consumption from other

appliances

is used less at 15% in

Australian

households.

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