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“Some people say that in our modern age, it is unnecessary to teach children about the skills of handwriting.” To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that with the current evolving technology, teaching youngsters the
skills
 of handwriting is less significant.
This
 essay totally disagrees with that statement. I believe that handwriting
skills
is
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 one of the vital
skills
children
 must learn at an early age as these
skills
 can help
children
 communicate better and improve their memory.
Children
 that are able to scribble or write can remember faster than youngsters that do not. Writing down notes, forces
children
 to slow down and
and
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focus on what they are writing, enabling them to easily recalls what they have written.
For instance
, from my experience of babysitting, I discovered that whenever I let Julie write down what she has learnt, she tends to remember more quickly and longer Young people that
pocessed
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possessed
processed
 the
capabilities
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 to write will
also
 have
a
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better communication
skills
.
While
writting
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writing
,
children
 will be able to pick up new words,
focus
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 on their writing. If handwritten notes, they can
also
 discover their mistakes and learn from them, and they will have a deeper understanding of what they have studied.
For instance
, a survey conducted by the University of
Michegan
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Michigan
 shows that
children
 that
handwritten
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 their own notes communicate better than young people that
relies
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 heavily on computer. In conclusion, for a high percentage of
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young people, the ability
of
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handwritting
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handwriting
 is very essential for young
children
 at
their
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 early age because it can improve a
child
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 capability to remember and enables them to communicate better with one another.
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