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With increased population communicating via internet and text message, face to face communication will become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree?

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Nawadays
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Nowadays
 people found an easy way to communicate with each other and
this
 technology is
devploment
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development
deployment
 every day to become
more
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easier to use . It is often assumed that when someone would like to meet
friend
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 or discuss a business or
having
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meeting
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 we used to go or travel wherever to do
such
 a thing ,
however
 , it is not longer matter because we could do all the things via
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the internet
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internet
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, we can having a meeting with many people
while
 we are sitting at home, we are
also
 able to communicate with our families who are living so for from us and watch them by only click .In the
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 we could
also
 have fun too with friends by playing online video
game
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. So
indeed
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the internet
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internet
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make
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 our life easier but
this
 Tech has
disadvanteges
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disadvantages
 too , when
public
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the public
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 get used to
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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 and not going by themselves to do some work they will
loose
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 many communication skills and they become
addictied
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addicted
 to these devices and
also
 shy or probably afraid to meet each other which is not
good
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 thing to our mental health ,
for example
 , many
activties
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activities
 are in
dangerous
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 to be
forgoten
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forgotten
 because children found
alterntive
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alternative
 way . In
conclusion
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Internet
 is a very good way to do a lot of things but we need to learn how to use it right and not
misunderstanding
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these beautiful Tech
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