Many people believe that media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, most famous people can easily access every person, especially

children

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's groups through various types of

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. Their action can affect both negatively and positively. For that reason, I agree to a certain degree that

celebrities

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have a negative influence on

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and

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essay will discuss the issue.

celebrities

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have both negative and positive aspects in their life.

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children

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might make role models from the negative side of

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’

life

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, smoking cigarettes and drinking are some negative aspects of

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’ lifestyles which could have grave impacts on youngsters’ lifestyles.

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children

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want to show themselves because of

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, so they might pretend to be someone that they are not. Examples can be seen in social

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such

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as Instagram and

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make some videos and clips about eating weird food. And

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some

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imitate some behaviour from their favourite

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and

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totally

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another person.

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, certain channels have covered the lives of successful superstars

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full of hardship, and

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has been a source of inspiration for a number of teenagers. To

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explain,

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felt highly inspired listening to how a person became famous. Since

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start believing what they see;

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, in my opinion, if parents can monitor the

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coverage of famous personalities that they are open to

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, it does not need necessarily have an adverse impact on them. In conclusion, I would argue that the

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coverage of

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is having both side effects if

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have a piece of good advice from their family.

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, it is not only parents that should select the best role model for kids, but the

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should consider an unsuitable issue for

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in every type of

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Topic Vocabulary:

Celebrity culture
Glamorization
Unrealistic expectations
Self-esteem
Scandals
Role models
Moral development
Mental health
Influence
Exposure
Social media platforms
Charity work
Inappropriate behavior
Perfection image
Negative impact
Inspire children

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Many people believe that media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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You missed an important meeting at work. Write a letter to your manager. In the letter: -apologize for not attending -explain why you did not attend -say what you will do to make up for it