The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
The table and pie chart illustrates the
amount
of police
money
in a specific area, Britain for 2017 and 2018. The table provides information about the sources of
fund
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while
the chart shows how the
budget
was spent.
Overall
, the
amount
of
money
which came from various sources decreased constantly in both two years and the
overall
amount
is nearly the same. The fund was spent on salaries which
is
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are
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given to officers and staff is higher rather than other fields. The highest
amount
of
budget
is
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came from
national
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the national
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government, amounting
for
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£175.5
million
and £177.8
million
respectively.
Thus
it can
be say
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that
national
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the national
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government plays an important role in one area of
United
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the United
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Kingdom. In terms of local taxes, the
amount
in 2017 rose slightly to reach £102.3
million
in 2018. The fund from other sources in both 2017 and 2018 holds
the
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a
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smilier
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smaller
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amount
of
police
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the police
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budget
, accounting for £38
million
and £38.5
million
in turn. With
regarding
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to
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the geographical
spilts
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splits
split
of spending
money
, the majority of
budget
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the budget
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went to the salaries of officers and staff which stand in
the
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apply
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first place, at a massive 75% and 69% respectively. The much
money
is used
in
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technology at a mere 14% in 2018 rather than in 2017.
Building
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The building
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and transport
budget
did not show any changes in both two years.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, money, budget, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 6 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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