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Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think advantages of charging people for a museum outweigh disadvantages?

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Currently, there are a variety of ancient
museums
 throughout the world. Many sites charge a fee to enter,
while
 others are free.
This
 has its advantages and disadvantages.
Museums
 are useful places for many
people
. We know that we pay to enter many
museums
. It has many advantages. paying
museums
 covers business expenses and pays museum workers for electricity and
equipment
. You have to pay to keep the place clean for all kinds of
equipment
 in the museum.
Museums
 will never develop if we don't pay for
equipment
 and workers. Some
museums
 are free. These
museums
 are
also
 good.Because there are many poor
people
 in the world, they cannot afford
such
 money.
People
 who can't afford it can visit the
museums
 for free and see the historical
equipment
 and organize everything freely with knowledge. A lot of
people
 in society have less access to
museums
 to learn about the history of art and much other important knowledge.
That is
 why in some places
museums
 are free .But I have to pay for each museum to cover itself. In conclusion, not all
museums
 in society should be free. If the
museums
 are free and the workers don't pay for the electricity, the
museums
 will never develop. I think that not all
museums
 should be free.
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