By punishing murderers with the death penalty, society is also guilt of committing murder. Therefore, life in prison is a better punishment for murderers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Killing a defendant as a punishment is still facing plenty of pros and cons. Recently, the number of death penalty considerably decreased. I totally agree that prison is better than murder and I will give an elucidation in
this
Linking Words
essay.
First,
Linking Words
everyone deserves forgiveness, regardless of the fault that they did. With
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
amnesty, they probably will change and correct their faults.
However
Linking Words
, the main goal of punishment is to change
peoples’
Change noun form
people’s
show examples
habits. After being imprisoned, people ideally get
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
second chance to be
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
good
member
Fix the agreement mistake
members
show examples
of society. How would people fix their
trait
Fix the agreement mistake
traits
show examples
if they were killed?
Second,
Linking Words
it should not be forgotten that ending
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
persons’
Change noun form
person’s
show examples
life is a remarkable problem as well.
This
Linking Words
is extremely opposite
with
Change preposition
to
show examples
the human rights that deployed in our civilization in the
last
Linking Words
few centuries. In order to respect human rights, the state has to respect human life as well.
In addition
Linking Words
, assassination is entirely
opposite
Correct article usage
the opposite
show examples
with
Change preposition
of
show examples
the democratization process. It could be argued that the folk
afraid
Add a missing verb
are afraid
show examples
country will use
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
legalized killing to press its oppositional group. In several autocratic states,
for example
Linking Words
, the supreme leader easily demolishes his or her political enemy.
Instead
Linking Words
of being used to uphold justice among inhabitants, executing the defendant undoubtedly can be used for another negative purpose.
This
Linking Words
type of sentence has an abundance of risk.
To sum up
Linking Words
, I think that the death penalty is too risky. With
this
Linking Words
punishment, we not only can not give forgiveness and a second chance to the offender
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
but
also
Linking Words
defy human rights and human dignity.
Submitted by sakinah.snr on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: