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Some people believe that cellphones are harmful to the children while others disagree. Discuss and give your opinion.

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In these modern days, new technologies
such
 as mobile
phones
 are easily in access for many adults and
children
.
While
 some people say mobile
phones
 are harmful to
children
, others believe they are safe for them. In the bellow essay, I will elaborate on these views
as well as
 my own point of view. On the one hand, new technologies
such
 as
cell
phones
 are very suitable. They have the capability to boost the learning process for
children
.
For example
, online classes are possible because of
cell
phones
 and their popularity
On the other hand
,
children
 must have a range of physical activities in their lifestyle. The cellphones and their applications decrease physical activities in
children
.
For instance
, many
children
 spent hours and hours on mobile
phones
 without even a metre of movement.
In addition
, there is a lot of information in social media applications which are extremely harmful to
children
. In spite of many controlling methods that are designed to make the cellphones safer to use, these devices are harmful to
children
. In my point of view,
however
, creating some limitations on using
cell
phones
 for
children
 could be useful for them its demerits outweigh to merits and would make them harmful for
children
. So I think we should let
children
 have
cell
phones
 after a specific age. In conclusion,
while
 some people believe it is not harmful for
children
 to use
cell
phones
 I think the opposing belief outweighs and we should keep the cellphones out of reach of
children
.
Submitted by omidateur on

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