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Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing today. What measures can government and individuals take tackle this issue ?

#world #measures #government #individuals
Recently, ecology problems are one of the most important topics. There
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 many factors which lead to
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 issues but one of
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the most
 significant
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is people and their factories, agricultural works and vehicles .
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 of our society know about the influence
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 our pollution on our earth, but no one does not want to do something
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this
. From my point of view, there
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 many
persons
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 who can try to solve
this
problem
 and now,
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 would try to say what they can do.
Firstly
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government can provide more
eco friendly
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transports
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 in the country.
This
 way we can avoid
this
 enormous amount of carbon which we throw out in nature when we ride
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the
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standart
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standard
 cars.
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Furthermore
,
that is
also
 can clean the air which we consume every second.
Secondly
, eco companies and
volontiers
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volunteers
 can start to provide lessons about the effect of
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global warming.
Additionally
, these lessons can be in every city and
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they
 can gather many small groups of people which
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should go
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 the lesson only once
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 month.
This
 way people can take
this
problem
 more seriously when they know what can happen
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with
 the world after
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 or more years. In conclusion, global warming is a big
problem
 which we should solve as quickly as possible.
That
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can be started
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 the
introducing
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 of
eco friendly
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 vehicles and lessons about
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warming. I believe, that everyone should be concerned about the
problem
 with our world and try to fix it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • burning of fossil fuels
  • greenhouse gases
  • trap heat
  • atmosphere
  • deforestation
  • carbon dioxide
  • greenhouse effect
  • industrial activities
  • agricultural practices
  • carbon emissions
  • renewable energy
  • environmental regulations
  • energy efficiency
  • carbon footprint
  • lifestyle changes
  • public transportation
  • recycling
  • conserving energy
  • LED bulbs
  • plant-based diet
  • raising awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • international cooperation
  • Paris Agreement
  • mitigate
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