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The internet has become profoundly efficient and popular that people choose it as a platform to learn. Some believe that it would eventually replace the need for books. Do you agree or disagree?

#internet #people #platform #believe #books
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In the present world, development of the technology is increased drastically. Including, the establishment
technology
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 in the learning system
such
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 as
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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. People can browse and communicate
with
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internet
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. It is agreed that someday, the
needs
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need
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of
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book
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books
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 will be replaced by
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browser
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browsers
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. Analyzing the efficiency of
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browser
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,
as well as
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assist
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government
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the government
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to
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in
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 keeping the
tress
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trees
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instead
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 of logging
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for
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apply
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makes a
paper
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.
Firstly
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,
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internet
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 is a common
things
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thing
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 in
the
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society nowadays. They have a smartphone, computer, laptop, and even television to browse any information
used
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using
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internet
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the internet
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. It
is
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depicts that
uses
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using
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 a
browser
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 is efficient and simple.
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, citizens can
got
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 all information within one
minutes
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 by their smartphone. They even bring their handphone in
the
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their
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 pocket.
However
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,
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book
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the book
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 needs a space or bag to bring it up and sometimes, timing is necessary when someone looking for data in the
book
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 by searching page by page.
That is
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 why
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the internet
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internet
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 is more popular than
paper
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.
Secondly
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, the world shows the deterioration of fresh air and depicts
a
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global warming day by day. One of the
reason
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reasons
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 is
trees
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tree
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 logging has been
happened
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happening
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 in the most of
forest
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forests
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 in
all
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the
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 country. Felling trees
is
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 needed to produce
a
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paper
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. Because of that, some
place
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start
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have start
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 to
implemented
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implement
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 a go green program with reduces
a
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the
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using
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 of
paper
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.
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, nowadays, shop
market
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markets
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 used
an
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apply
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email to send their invoice
instead
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 of printing
invoice
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invoices
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. It is
clearly
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 that someday
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a book
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book
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books
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 or any
paper
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 will
disappeared
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. To summarise, the using of
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internet
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the internet
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 is profoundly effective to search
a information
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information
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 and keep the world
save
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. It is pretty agreed​ that
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browser
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browsers
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 replaced the need
of
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for
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 books or papers. After
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a thoroughly
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thoroughly
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 analysis
in
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this
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 subject, the adverb effect of lost
papet
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paper
 is always greater than the negative effects.
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