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What were the best or worst moments of your life and why is that moment still vivid in your mind?

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Today I am going to write
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 the worst or best experiences. My name is Erika I am
twenty two
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 years old,
I
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and I
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am study
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in
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the
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university. When I was a child I worked in the
marked
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market
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 helping my mother,
however
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 my
father
 doesn't
finished
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the
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school because they are eight siblings in his family, so my
father
 did not have economic stability. It is the worst
experiences
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 for me and my parents. Even
thought
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 we
didnot
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did not
didn't
 have economic stability, we
was
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 very happy together. My
father
 says always that we are the most important in his life. He is always optimistic and my mother is friendly, she
have
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 many friends and she helps them sometimes.
On the other hand
, the best
experiences
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 is that my
father
 works as a heavy
machinary
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machinery
 operator, my mother sometimes goes to the market and I
am
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study. Now we have economic stability.
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 God we are in good health. and I hope we continue like
this
 for many years.
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