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Children have too much freedoms nowadays. Do you agree or disagree ? Why ?

#children #freedoms
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In
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 cutting-edge era, a number of
parents
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 do not care for their children as they give them more right for performing any
work
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. I totally agree with
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 notion.
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 essay will discuss reasons for having more opportunities for children which will be elaborated on in the subsequent paragraphs. To embark with, there are some reasons why heir has more power these days. The predominant one is that in
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 modern epoch,
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 the advancement of ,technology offspring can do any
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 their interests with the help of various electronic gadgets
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 as computers, laptops, smartphones and many more. They are dependent only on these gadgets so they have no need for their
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 for doing any
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.
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 sitting at their home they can talk to anyone and on social sites they can make
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 with anyone from all over the world.
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 may lead to more privilege for them.
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, everyone knows that these days every parent becomes a workaholic ,so they have less time to spend and explore any place with their scion. Whenever their heir wants to go anywhere at that time they always allow visiting anywhere. Owing to their
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 they have more flexibility. Nowadays, most little ones like to visit with their
friends
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. Some of their
friends
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 are good but some are not so whenever go with their
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 if those
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 are not good for them
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 they could influence by them and they
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 do bad
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 as those
friends
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 do in their life
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 why
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 is not good for scion to have more exemption in their life . If they have good
friends
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then
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 it would be good for Scion,
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,
parents
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 should take care of their little ones. In conclusion, having more ability for offspring
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 technology and
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'
work
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 is not worthwhile for children's careers.
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