The graphs below show how people in a European city reached their office and got back home in 1959 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show how people in a European city reached their office and got back home in 1959 and 2009.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate a comparison of the travelling journeys of European citizens between 1959 and 2009, separated by five different types of transportation. In 1959, a majority of people were doing their journey to work by walking,
while
in 2009 the main trend was using car transport. We can observe that 55% of Europeans were going by foot on their journeys in 1959 when the average distance on their journeys was 3.5 kilometres. In the same year, 30% of people were using public vehicles despite only 10% using automobiles. In 2009 the use of the automobile increased by 25%, and going by walking decreased by 35%
moreover
public transportation remains almost similar compared to 1959. Surprisingly, going to work on foot is the second most popular transport in 2009 even though the average travelling distances are around 6 times longer compared to 1958.
Overall
, the main travelling system used over the years is by foot
however
the use of the car increases in 2009 when the average distances significantly increased.
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