Nowadays parents put too much pressure on their children to succeed. What is the reason for this? Is this a negative or Positive development.

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children
have been
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a considerable amount of stress in achievement because of their
parent
's enforcement. The
parent
's attitude
developes
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develops
developers
developed
due to
many
reason
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and the
continuoation
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continuation
of
this
trend will bring negative consequences. First of all, one of the main factors is the utter care from
parent
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parents
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. They always hope
the
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for the
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best things for their
children
such
as
:
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a stable job with
high
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salary, a big house,
car
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...
Therefore
, they make their
children
to
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study more,
achieve
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and achieve
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more in life which potentially
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forms
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the
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pressure
inside
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on
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the kids.
Moreover
, some folks are so competitive that they force their
children
to be more
success
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,
more
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and more
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intelligent for them to show off
with
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everyone. In my point of view,
this
development is completely negative which will badly impact
on
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children
's life.
For example
, if the child has to put up with a lot of
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stress
and pressure, they will be mentally ill. They will against their
parent
's desire and do what they think is right for them. In
addtition
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addition
to that, if the result doesn't live up to their expectation, the
children
will become
depression
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.
For instance
,
according to
data, there are 20%
children
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of children
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in the world suicide because they think they are
loser
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losers
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and make their
parent
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parents
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disappointed.As we can see, has it not been for the emotionless of the
parent
, the
children
's future would have been
change
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. In conclusion, though enforcement of parents might help to gain success of
children
, I believe that
this
could be psychologically disadvantageous for them. Their future
is depend
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on
family's
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the family's
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education. So for
children
today, for future
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tomorrow
tomorow
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tomorrow
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Excessive pressure
  • Academic achievements
  • Professional success
  • Secure future
  • Social comparison
  • Competitive environment
  • Psychological impact
  • Stress and anxiety
  • Resilience
  • Work ethic
  • Emotional well-being
  • Supportive parenting
  • Achievements
  • Life skills
  • Balance
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