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Many people use distance-learning programs to study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the benefit as much as attending college or university. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #programs #study #home #benefit #college #university
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 of attending a
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offline
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 at
college
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 or
university
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, nowadays many
students
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 prefer to choose online learning
methods
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 using applications
such
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 as Zoom, Google Meet,etc which support
this
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 kind of method. As far as I am concerned about
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 phenomenon, I personally agree that online learning
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also
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 bring benefits as much as attending
college
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 or
university
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offline
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. First and foremost, it is more flexible to attend online classes from everywhere without having to go to
college
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 or
university
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. The
students
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 can easily take a
class
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 from home or from where they are as long as they have an internet connection.
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, by choosing online learning
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,
students
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 who are
also
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 office workers can attend the
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 from their workplaces.
Moreover
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,
students
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 who are having a trip to another city/town
also
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 can join the
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 because it is an online
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.
Furthermore
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, by choosing online learning
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students
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 can take saves on transportation costs.
Students
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 have no longer to spend their money on transport because they can take the
class
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 from home. To exemplify, choosing online learning
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 makes
students
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 go to
college
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 or
university
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 only a few times for administrative affairs. If it is compared to
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 learning
methods
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 which require
students
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 to go to
college
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 or
university
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 every day, there are a lot of money can be saved. In conclusion, I firmly believe that by choosing online learning
methods
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students
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 can take benefits as much as attending
college
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 or
university
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offline
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.
Students
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 are more flexible to manage their classes and have an advantage on the transport costs side because it can be easy to attend online classes from everywhere only with the internet and a laptop.
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