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The given table chart illustrates the seven different types of electronic devices used in New Zealand in 2002 and 2020.

The given table chart illustrates the seven different types of electronic devices used in New Zealand in 2002 and 2020.
The table above depicts the portion of seven electronic products in New Zealand during two different years
periode
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period
, 2002 and 2020. In 2002,
consumer
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consumers
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 purchased
washing
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a washing
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machine
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machines
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 and
color
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colour
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 TV to support their daily life and enjoy leisure activities, with
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a portion
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portion
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portions
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 of 97% and 95% respectively and had increased to 98% and 99% in the next 18 years because
its
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they
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 utilize as
primarily
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primary
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 goods. Computer and cell phone
purchased
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 went up significantly, from 50% to 78% and 20% to 80%, which was used to working and communicating in the modern era. The
increase
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increased
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 purchase
in
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of
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computer
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computers
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 and cell
phone
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phones
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 had
lead
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led
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 to
decrease
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a decrease
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 in video
recorder
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recorders
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 and digital
camera
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cameras
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, mainly
due to
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cutting-edge
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the cutting-edge
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 technology they offer over the previous device.
On the other hand
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, dishwasher ownership had
increase
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 by 10% to 55%. In conclusion, the trend increase in electronic
device
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devices
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 purchased has led to
decrease
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a decrease
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of
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in
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 the
others good
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other goods
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 because of
substitution
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the substitution
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 nature.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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