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Nowadays, more and more children are being brought up in single parents family. What are the cause of this? What effect can be seen as a result of this?

#children #parents #effect
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In recent years, there is
increasing
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an increasing
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 number of
children
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being
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are being
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took
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taken
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 care
in
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of
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 single
parents
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parents'
parent's
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family
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families
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. The primary causes of
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 phenomenon are
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the parent'
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parent'
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parents'
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divorce
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 and
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the parent'
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parent'
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parents'
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 deceased.
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, the possible effects which may
happened
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happen
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 are
lonliness
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loneliness
 and unoptimal
children
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's development.
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 with, the first factor of the
aformentioned
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aforementioned
 issue is
divorce
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. Parents who decided to end their marriage relationship will be affected
on
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by
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children
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's life, after their care
givers'
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givers
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divorce
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children
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 will follow
one
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 of their
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parent
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parents
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 based on an
aggreement
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agreement
 or a court ruling.
Consequently
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,
children
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 are only raised by either a mother or a father. Another possible cause is
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parent
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parents
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 who
left
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were left
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 by their spouses
due to
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passed
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passing
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 away. Automatically,
children
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 will
lost
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lose
be lost
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one
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 of the
parent
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's
figure
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figures
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. The
differences
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difference
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 between
divorce
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 and passed away is that there is no possible interaction between a child and passed away parents. The effect for
children
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 who
raised
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are raised
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 by single
care giver
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caregiver
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 is feeling lonely.
This
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 means they will miss the affection of
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their parent's
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parent's
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parent
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 figure and they may
also
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 crave for
parent
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's attention. Another effect is that there is a chance
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children
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for children
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 to not develop optimally. Mother and father have different roles in
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children
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children's
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 upbringing,
mother
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the mother
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 provide
an
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apply
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affection
while
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father
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the father
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teach
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teaches
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a courage
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courage
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 and firmness. If
children
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 do not get
one
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 of the
role
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roles
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 from each
parent
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,
children
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 may crave
for
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apply
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one
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 of
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parent's
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the parent's
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role
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roles
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.
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, based on
survey
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a survey
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 Indonesia is of the highest number of
fatherless
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the fatherless
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country
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countries
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; the effect of
this
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 is
children
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 will
may
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apply
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look for
an
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apply
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attention.
To sum up
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, two
ppossible
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possible
 causes of
children
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 who
raised
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are raised
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 by
sole
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the sole
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 family are
divorce
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 and
parent
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's
passed
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passing
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 away.
Moreover
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, the results of the causes are that a child may feel empty and not optimal development.
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