In marriages today, some argue that it is the rosponsibility of both spouses to earn a living for the family. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, responsibility in a marriage is a crucial factor. In fact, I agree with those who think that spouses must cooperate with each other to undergo their life for two main reasons.

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, being together is a commitment between a man and a girl.

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that, they must talk about how they will lead their household because it can be a problem in the future. And I believe that

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and women with good

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will have no trouble in finance. To illustrate

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condition, I will take Indonesia as an example. In Indonesia, especially in Java, it is a common situation for a husband and a wife to have a job. Because they realized that there are so many needs,

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as home, motorcycle, and others. And the price of living cost is increasing all the time (rice, electricity, fuel, etc)

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, the other reasons are because recently, there

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no differences between a man and a woman, they have the same position.

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, I will take Indonesia once again. In my country, there is a rule about the equality of all gender. Many companies open

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job vacancies that just only can be filled by women. Indeed, with a lower quote.

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, there are so many divorced cases caused by economic conditions,

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as they cannot afford the money. And become a big trouble in their household. In conclusion, I believe that it is a good decision to let a wife work because she can help her husband.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

251 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

marriages
responsibility
earn a living
families
spouses
financial contributions
equality
financial independence
freedom
choices
division of responsibility
burden
share responsibilities
work-life balance
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In marriages today, some argue that it is the rosponsibility of both spouses to earn a living for the family. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

In number of countries, some People think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing New railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Other believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In some countries, younger people are neglecting their right to vote. What problems does this cause and what are some of the possible solutions?

Some people argue that social media platforms are essential for communication and staying connected, while others believe that they pose a threat to personal privacy. On which position do you stand? Discuss the supporting ideas for your chosen position.

Task 2. Some people think that living in big cities is bad for people's health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?