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Some people think that homework is not necessary for students’ development. Do you agree or disagree?

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The benefits of
homework
 have been continuously criticized by many.
Students
 are urging their schools to abolish
homework
 as it is not giving them any good. In my opinion, it does help
students
' development.
Homework
 is thought to be just a burden for
students
.
However
, it does help pupils not just with their knowledge but
also
 with their attitude.
Firstly
, it helps
students
 to prepare for the next topic the next day.
Homework
 is usually
being
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given by proctors in order for their class to read ahead of time so that they could participate in the discussion. In the Philippines,
for instance
, our teachers would give us tasks to be done at home on a daily basis.
This
 is their way for us to study the lessons that will be discussed the next day.
Secondly
,
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homework
, it enhances one's
discipline
. Many people think that
homework
 only develops the brain. But, in fact, it
also
 helps to build a sense of
discipline
 in a person.
For example
, when a student routinely does his
homework
, it helps him
discipline
 himself from all other distractions like video games.
On the other hand
, there are
also
 drawbacks with it. With the overwhelming number of
homework
 being given
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 different subjects, the
students
 are getting burnt out.
This
 could lead to an increase in school leavers and
also
 an increase in uneducated people.
To conclude
,
homework
 is very vital to every student. It enhances their knowledge
as well as
 their sense of
discipline
.
However
, teachers should
also
 consider the amount of
homework
 to leave to
students
 as
this
 could lead to a negative impact.
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