More and more people want to buy clothes, cars and other items with famous brands. What are the reasons? Is it a positive or negative development?
Nowadays people buy new things for their own satisfaction, even though they do not really need those kinds of
stuff
. The advancement also
brings new brands that offer their newest product according to
the trend, for example
, clothes, cars and other glamour stuff
. Further
development could bring some effects either good or bad to society. This
writing will discuss both views and give an argument why
it brings negative effects on us.
On the one hand, civilians that gave their money for those items could bring bad habits, Change preposition
as to why
for example
, some teenagers compare their shoes with their friends, maybe someone would get envious,and plan to do a crime for him, or maybe too many consumptions could waste their money that could have been used for their future. In addition
, it also
could bring them to be a consumerism person. Finally
, if they could not manage their expenses, they could not afford their own daily needs.
On the other side, there are some people that often get used to their belongings and ended
upWrong verb form
end
boredom
. So they decided to buy new things that could satisfy their will. Correct your spelling
bored
Furthermore
, the other person would pay for some new accessories for their hype and to keep up with the trends. Just like teens in this
era, the development could allow them to have those fancy things and use them for their daily life, like when at school, or maybe when hanging out with their friends. Additionally
, not only for wearings, this
hyped stuff
also
could bring money, for instance
when we bought
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buy
stuff
and then
resale it while
increasing the price, we could get some profit from them.
In conclusion, consumptive behaviour starts with human needs, they willingly get what they want to get
themself happy. Verb problem
make
Besides
, those negative effects could be countered by finding the opportunity to create a business. Last
but not least, the advancement of the era brings many possibilities for our habits depending on how we face and control ourselves.Submitted by twiggseducationbdg on
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The essay addresses the prompt by discussing both positive and negative effects of buying popular brands. It could further improve by providing more in-depth analysis and specific examples to strengthen the argument.
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