More and more people want to buy clothes, cars and other items with famous brands. What are the reasons? Is it a positive or negative development?
Nowadays people buy new things for their own satisfaction, even though they do not really need those kinds of
stuff
. The advancement Use synonyms
also
brings new brands that offer their newest product Linking Words
according to
the trend, Linking Words
for example
, clothes, cars and other glamour Linking Words
stuff
. Use synonyms
Further
development could bring some effects either good or bad to society. Linking Words
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writing will discuss both views and give an argument Linking Words
why
it brings negative effects on us.
On the one hand, civilians that gave their money for those items could bring bad habits, Change preposition
as to why
for example
, some teenagers compare their shoes with their friends, maybe someone would get envious,and plan to do a crime for him, or maybe too many consumptions could waste their money that could have been used for their future. Linking Words
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could bring them to be a consumerism person. Linking Words
Finally
, if they could not manage their expenses, they could not afford their own daily needs.
On the other side, there are some people that often get used to their belongings and Linking Words
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end
boredom
. So they decided to buy new things that could satisfy their will. Correct your spelling
bored
Furthermore
, the other person would pay for some new accessories for their hype and to keep up with the trends. Just like teens in Linking Words
this
era, the development could allow them to have those fancy things and use them for their daily life, like when at school, or maybe when hanging out with their friends. Linking Words
Additionally
, not only for wearings, Linking Words
this
hyped Linking Words
stuff
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also
could bring money, Linking Words
for instance
when we Linking Words
bought
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buy
stuff
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then
resale it Linking Words
while
increasing the price, we could get some profit from them.
In conclusion, consumptive behaviour starts with human needs, they willingly get what they want to Linking Words
get
themself happy. Verb problem
make
Besides
, those negative effects could be countered by finding the opportunity to create a business. Linking Words
Last
but not least, the advancement of the era brings many possibilities for our habits depending on how we face and control ourselves.Linking Words
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The essay provides a clear introduction and conclusion. It follows a logical structure with well-supported main points.
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The essay addresses the prompt by discussing both positive and negative effects of buying popular brands. It could further improve by providing more in-depth analysis and specific examples to strengthen the argument.
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