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Some people think that getting a degree from university is the best way to guarantee a good job, others believe that it would be better to go straight into work and get experience instead

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İn our modern world
education
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 is one of the most important factors in a person’s life. Though some people believe that
education
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 is necessary for society, others think the practice is urgent to find a good job. I believe there are far more advantages
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education
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 than
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disadvantages, which will be analyzed in
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 essay. First and foremost,
university
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education
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 helps people to find
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good job opportunities in the future. There are a lot of
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work places
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workplaces
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 that require a
university
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 degree.
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, doctors and teachers cannot
work
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 in any workplace without a
university
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education
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. It is needless to say that today many companies demand a
university
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 degree.
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,
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 has been accepted that high
education
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 is too important to find a good job.
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, there are some jobs where you do not need a degree to
work
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.
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, if you want to do dropshipping
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 Amazon or other online platforms, you need experience for
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 more than
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.
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, some
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big companies start not to demand a diploma. One of them is Google. All of
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 points to the conclusion that I am of the opinion that a higher
education
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 has brought far more advantages than experience and it seems it would be good if one gets a good
education
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 first and
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work
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 and gain experience.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • higher education
  • specialized fields
  • job prospects
  • earning potential
  • formal education
  • networking opportunities
  • career advancement
  • practical skills
  • work environment
  • financial independence
  • high costs
  • skills and experience
  • formal education
  • prioritize
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