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More and more people are moving away from agricultural background to relocate to cities in to look for work. what will be the consequences of this problem and what solution Can you offer?

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 era of industrialization, in order to find jobs people living in
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 are settling down in metropolises. The following essay will discuss two main consequences of the aforementioned phenomenon including overpopulation and traffic congestion,
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, the solutions for these
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relocation of factories and public propaganda. There are several investigations that the issue leads to.
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, the spike
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 city residents causes overpopulation which is connected directly
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 the accommodation problem. More inhabitants exist more apartments are demanded,
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 a result, appears a heavy burden to a governmental budget.
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, only one apartment building with 80 flats on it costs approximately 100
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dollars.
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, as a population mass grows the number of vehicles increase,
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, it loads the capacitance of transport infrastructures. The evidence for
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 district in Almaty which is famous
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 its traffic jams
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 18 hours. Moving on to the solution aspect, one great thing to do in order to prevent the aforesaid is to open new workplaces in a rural
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.
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 can be reached by moving away industries from cities and replacing them in
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 countryside. In sum, the action will impede workforce flow from rural areas.
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, councils should provide more propagation programs to discourage people from migrating.
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, if rural workers are popularized by the mass media, the
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 society will be substantial.
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urbanization will lead to overpopulated cities and strain on
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the transport
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 system. To tackle the problem
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actions should be taken along several fronts: through opening jobplaces and supporting the workers with the council propaganda.
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