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Some countries pay extremely high salaries to people. Some people believe that the country must not do that and make a limit for the salaries. Do you agree or disagree?

#countries #salaries #people #country #limit
Every
employ
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deserve
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there
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their
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 pay based on their
work
. Some people think that
salary
 has to be
limit
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 for everyone and totally disagree with that statement.I will describe my own thought in that essay .
Firstly
 high pay to higher position employ is very benefits. In recent years,every
company
 try to make happy their
employes
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. Since they always try to give extra benefits to their
employes
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.
Additionally
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 if you try to get
you
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your
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 own
employes
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employees
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 happiness you need to give them
promotion
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 of their based on their
work
.
SO
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,they give them high pay based on their position.
Socoundly
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Secondly
 every
employs
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doesn’t
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 have the
work
.
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, A CEO and HR in a
company
they
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didn’t have the same
work
to
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 that
company
. They do different
work
 for a
company
, so they need
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different
salary
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salaries
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 to pay.
However
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 a lot of people think that
salary
 has need a limit but if you don't think that maybe
employee
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 are not going to Inspire
to
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 do their job.
for instance
, A employee always
try
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 to
be give
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 his best and he
also
try
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 to do his
work
 perfectly but doesn't get any promotion and if he didn't get extra pay for his job maybe you will be disappointed
to
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in
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this
 job you never try to give his best for
this
company
. To Conclusion, Reserve their own price so every
company
 should pay
to
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higher
salary
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 to their employee based on their
work
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic inequality
  • civil unrest
  • motivation
  • productivity
  • brain drain
  • standard of living
  • societal well-being
  • tax revenues
  • public services
  • infrastructure
  • economic growth
  • consumer spending
  • meritocratic society
  • barrier to entry
  • diversity
  • innovation
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